ShiroiAkuma's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Red Apple]

Sieht sehr gut aus! Nur wirkt ihre Haut ein wenig wie Porzellan, durch die sehr klaren Highlights. Die sich nahezu auf jeder Wölbung abbilden. Ihre Oberschenkel sind etwas kurz, würdest du die jetzt verlängern, müsstest du auch ihre Unterbeine verlängern, denn Oberschenkel zu Knie Unterseite ist Equivalent wie Knie Unterseite zu Fußknöchel. Ihr Füße... Ihr rechter sieht ganz ordentlich aus, auch wenn er aus einer niedrigen Perspektive aufgenommen worden zu sein scheint. Ihr linker könnte etwas Feintuning vertragen. Also beide Füße scheinen aus einer anderen Perspektive als der Rest des Körpers gezeichnet worden zu sein, so scheinen die Schulter aus der leichten Vogelperspektive gezeichnet zu sein, ihre Hüfte aus einer leichten Froschperspektive, obwohl man die backen nicht so sehen würde, da ihre hüfte nach hinten gestreckt ist, zu dem noch nach links, während ihre Füße komplett in einer Froschperspektive gezeichnet sind (Als hätte die Kamera auf dem Boden gestanden.

Dafür hast du den Ribcage (Brustkorb) sehr gut getroffen, die Pose wirkt auch sehr dynamisch ,außerdem auch weiblich, da sie nach innen gerichtet ist (Beine). Also weiter so! Ist wirklich schon sehr gut!

Wegen dem Apfel muss ich an Eva denken? Ist das von jener Mythologie inspiriert worden. Ist der Apfel in diesem Fall, die Frucht der Erkennnis, oder die der Verführung?

TrueThunderCraft responds:

ohhh jaa... ich glaub ich sehs jetz das die perspektive ein wenig verzerrt ist :'D
ähh nee ich meine das ist absicht... da ist irgendwo ein schwarzes loch was durch die enorme gravitationskraft den Raum ein wenig verzerrt... also alles normal ;'D

und danke wieder einmal für die super kritik! :)

und neee... ich wollte nur die natur zum vorschein bringen und habe eine farbspanne von rot zu grün verwendet damit es eine farbharmonie gibt :)
und bei rot und grün dachte ich an einen apfel.. weil äpfel sind auch lecker... und jetz hab ich hunger auf nen apfel >~< (und "bad apple" ist auch cool ^-^)

also nicht so viel hintergrundgedanke :D
aaaber das muss ja nicht jeder wissen... dann kann sich jeder seine eigene interpretation schmieden ;D

[Morphobia]

Wow! She has many sexy feet! Great illustration. Interesting concept.

[Splash Woman 2]

Well done. I would work well as a underwater race in Starbound. The colors working well together. Her bright skin emphasizes her femininity. You did a good job with cell shading the character, I also noticed the rim light. Which other would call reflected light, I guess. Proportions are very good also.

[Music]

It looks very good, but her left foot looks like it was flatten. The lower lines (her soles) need to curve downwards a bit, because the horizon line is at breasts level, I think. But you are already on a very good level.

TrueThunderCraft responds:

thanks! :)
I am not too happy with the left foot too.. because of it's flatness ^^
Well I could improve on drawing clothes and especially shoes... ( there are not that much clothes in this picture too ^^ )
and thnx alot for the scout :3

[Sunset Glow]

Don't be so hard to yourself, it's fantastic work. The eyes are really good and in a continuous style so I think your approach was semi realistic style. Also the I really like her beauty spot on her cheek. Her smile is soft and nice. So don't worry. It's definitely very good work!

[Vency]

The line art is very clean also you colored it so that you can barely notice it on some parts. And I think there are many parts that were made without any kind of line art. I would guess the head body ratio is about 1:7. Her wings are painted in a very effective way. I really like the details at the elbows. I guess she is a Queen Harpy because of her crown. Her antennas on her crown remind me some Pectinate Antennae.

Her bottomless shoes and toeless Thigh-Highs with suspenders show her connection to nature. I interpret her sharp nails that she is something like a predator too. Very good. Also her Pauldrons have typical features from the nature. A really brilliant idea butterflies uses these kind of eyes, so that predators think they being stared at by a larger animal. So her have two functions light protection because of the material and some kind of illusion for enemy's.

Her wings seem to be from white dove, if I'm right. I really like the picture, I see that there a lot of effort especially with all the details of the nature.

The background is done really nicely. A very good example of lost and found and not being clean cut all the way around. :D I really like the rays and the pollution that is flying around.

Also really nice clothing colors. While yellow and blue are almost complementary and yellow and purple directly complementary, they still fit together in this illustration. Because of the saturation and value, I think.

They're a just few slight spots, where I miss some detail or additional shading. But this is just my own taste and I want to stay objective and not subjective.

Subjective I really like her ears. I really like sharps ears from elves etc.

Objectively speaking I think they don't match to her mood. I see it like this: The ears point too much upwards, this shows me that she is under much tense or she suddenly listens attentively. They were more relaxed side down, if she is not under much tension, I think. Or I'm being smug about something. For example Nekomimi/Elves/Fairies can also support their emotions through different gestures, something like that I mean. But maybe I'm barking up the wrong tree so it won't influence my rating.

Really good work.

Jettyjetjet responds:

wow such a thorough thought out response, i am immensely grateful. You've moved me to post up the short story that inspired this character. Although i didn't post much info about her story, other then "harpy" in the tag, you deducted VERY WELL. I'm impressed with your understanding of all the elements from color theory to story telling. I like your thoughts on the ears, will consider using that next time i do a piece on her.

[All That Remains]

Excuse my poor English.
All my ratings belongs to this!
I was like amazing ＼(°o° ); as I saw it in the showcase.
Damn hope it will get featured in COTM3 anyways. It totally deserves it in my eyes. Great painting and also very detailed. The bones and the skull is well done, very nice talent for the light and shadows.
Keep it up.

RimKeLLo responds:

Thank you.
It's really nice when someone appreciates your work )
But because this is "old" picture it it will not entering in COTM3. So for that competition, i'll draw a new one.

[Redhead Girl]

Don't know how to critique, because I'm not very familiar with comic style, but I'll do my best.

The tendons are connected with the collar bones that's correct, but if she looks to one side we would mostly see the one which has the most tension. Sorry can't describe it better in English.

Example: She is looking to her right side, so we would see mostly just the her left tendon from the neck. (If you look at the picture it would be the right one), you can draw both but the one which is loose due to the direction she is looking. Should be much shorter.

Her neck muscle, one her left side wouldn't overlap her left shoulder.
The transition between neck muscle and should is smooth by females.
(I will send you a PM later, where you can study the female body and some nice tutorials.)
So you shouldn't draw muscular shoulders, except she should have strong shoulders.
The eyes are too close together, but it still works in this style.
Collar bones to close together. Let more space between them. It's hard to describe.

But still hope this helps you. Keep up the good work :)

[The german soldier]

The Background is very awesome. I really love the color palette which you used here. Also you took care that there is more contrast in the foreground and less from things that are farther away. This really adds a nice depth in the picture. Very well done!